Showing posts with label Sherryl D Hancock. Show all posts
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Sunday, August 1, 2021

When Angels Fall by Sherryl D Hancock

Rating: WARTY!

This started out badly-written, and it got worse. I read this right close to the beginning:

"He's single," the woman said, as if confirming it for Devin. It took Devin a second to realize that the woman obviously thought she was trying to pump her for information on Jams. She laughed nervously, shaking her head. "Oh, no, I wasn't," she began
This is what happens when an author doesn't pay attention to what she's writing. Devin here isn't answering something the other woman said; she's answering something the author wrote as narration, so Devin's answer makes zero sense.

The story started by having the air force pilot (and the initials of the title spell 'WAF' - a World War Two abbreviation for Women's Air Force'), Skyler Boché, speaking perfectly normally and then after a couple of pages she's suddenly off and running in some sort of attempt at Cajun speech, and it's so unintelligible at times that I gave up on it. Yes, by all means a word or two here and there, but pigeon English? No! I might have read a bit more were it not for that, but I really didn't like her anyway for her smoking, and it soon became clear she was going to be the moody, petulant one, so no. Just no. And what's with that name? Skyler originally comes from the Dutch for Scholar, so although it is found in Louisiana, it's hardly a popular name, but Boché? That is French, but it's French for an insulting word for a German. Is this really what the author wanted to convey?

On top of all that, Devin is out there hassling this poor air force pilot who clearly wants time to herself yet Devin is buzzing around her like a fly, and she never gives up. She's annoying as hell. I just wanted to swat her. This book had way too much baggage going on, and that was in just the first few tedious pages.